Favorite Paper

My favorite paper would be the narrative. It was the simplest and most creative writing paper we had in this class. It was more about what had happened to us and we were able to write without evidence. More like a show and tell not the rest of our essays. My paper was called Confused writer. Since did happened to me I felt like i was able to have this paper be the easiest paper of them all.

Not only was the confessed writer my favor paper, it was also the only paper that when I rewrote it I had a B. I didn't need to struggle throughout like I usually do in the other papers. In this paper I didn't have to argue nothing or prove anything but tell about a story that happened to me and I enjoyed writing this paper. The rest of the papers where just to stressful and so many drafts and rewrites where put into it. In my first paper I felt like I didst stress about it because I don't feel like I had to look "deeper" in to meaning like the rest of the papers.

12 Thinking Critically about Evidence

Pathos

- Getting ticketed for wearing saggy pants. Should not get ticketed. Its your own clothes you own style.

-Imagine feeling uncomfortable wearing things you don't like.

Logos.

-Stereotyping people with saggy pants.

-Gang banger

-Thugs

-Criminals.

People should not be get ticked by the way they dress up.

Girls wear thongs, no ticket men wear saggy pants 200 fine, equals unfair.

Ethos

-I know a lot of friends who wear saggy pants and they are not thugs, gang banger, or criminals.

-Counter argument-They show there but hanging out and we don't want to see that. Girls show there breast or even wear thongs showing a lot too.

My thesis statement is that people who wear saggy pants should not get ticked with a 200 dollar fine because its stereotyping a certain group of people, taking freedom of expression and is unfair. When reading my article the strongest points would be having the counter argument of the readers.

For example some people argue that they should get ticketed because we don't want to be seeing their "goodies" hang out. I agree with the fact that I wouldn't want to see ones goodies hanging out but that means that women who have their breast hanging out, or wearing thongs should also get ticketed with a 200 fine.

My source seems weak once I reread it because I'm using one of my own experiences with a friend, and many readers will not take my credibility so seriously. I try to connect it with my thesis statement but once again i fail to have used a more stronger source.

Analyzing and Writing Good Arguments

First I analyzed, that when a writer doesn't use a counter argument, on his/her article they have their argument sound weaker. For example, when the writers in the 78 million bag, they stated reasons on how much time and money is wasted in the possession of weed but they do not talk about the cons for this argument. In my argument I now know that I will have a pro and the readers argument in my paper.

Secondly , I analyzed that writers shouldn't sound so informal or unprofessional when writing their paper. In one of the articles they state how they would be millions of dollars o"f debt due to black men buying reefer." This words change your view on the argument and on the writers. It help me realize that I should carefully word my argument because I wouldn't want to offend anybody.

Thirdly, I analyzed that it is important to have sources that actually will be taken seriously in my article. You cannot just start having random people who you may see important to a writer but irrelevant to the argument. Just because your source may have a high source like a "state major" or "cop" if what they state in your argument doesn't flow with what you are trying to convince readers , then it will loose the focus in your argument.

When writing an argument paper writers should not doubt what they are trying to argue. Using words like some, sorta, and words that make not seem so confident may not let readers take your argument seriously.

Assignment 10

Peer Review Edits

For the new idea of peer edits it helped me because I felt like a had a better understandings of the article first. We told each other ideas on how to improve our own essays and discussed the article too. I found it very helpful because I actually feel like my second draft was much improved considering the first draft. In my first draft i felt like my thesis statement was weak, and in the peer group there also told me it was contradicting.

My weakness is definitively loosing focus on peer edits and talking about other things. Not only that but i feel like I'm to nice when it comes to peer edits. I don't want to sound rude or mean even though i know were helping each other out. My strength would be talking in person about what could be changed a bit , or looses focus on other persons papers. I rather talk it on then actually write it down on a paper.

I found it more helpful actually been in a group, that way you can actually try to stay focus and have more comfort to talk with other people , then just one person into explaining them your opinion.When I was involved in the writing center at high school it made is easier too just to have a group for me and for the person having there papers checked out by other students. We have different ideas , different opinions to look at and take into consideration.

Peer Review

-One on one , helps those who are timid to feel a little more comfort.

- Focused on one paper, other then 2 or 3 papers.

- Able to have everything written on the peer review sheet other then forgetting what peers told you in review group.

Peer Review Group

-More opinions from other classmates that can help you more, other than just hearing one opinion.

-More talking from other classmates and hearing there ideas too.

-See mistakes from more writers then just seeing a mistake from one person.

Assignment 9

My weaknesses, my errors.

In my first 2 papers I had to rewrite them because there was a lot of questioning for the reader. One of my weakness is forgetting that the reader is not always aware of what I'm talking about,because i tend to forget that not everyone knows what I'm talking about. For example, in the paper about the narrative literacy I told my readers i was in an avid class. My audience quickly questioned me what is avid? I right away assumed that the audience would know what it meant since I had it for like four years.

Also in my papers I tend to sounds very informal and that right there is very unprofessional. I try to but once i look at it again there i am using " you" Professional writing should not have you. Not only that but i tend to repeat words like I believe, in my opinion, I remembered throughout my paper. I've had peer edits where they always tell me the same thing and somehow i still don't have it engraved in my head.

Finally I've had this problem since high school. Getting off topic is one of the toughest things I've had to deal with when it comes to writing. Its so easy to forget about what your thesis statement and start rambling about other things that has nothing to do with your topic. Then there is the organization of the essay. I've realized that in this class I tend to try to answer the assignment questions , forgetting about the intro, body and conclusion. The reminder of "students it must have a thesis statement ." always should be in my mind but when I've looked at my recent papers I've realized I failed to do so.

The $78 million bag

This article is talking about legalizing marijuana, because it will reduce are taxes. It also talks about how much money goes into filing cases in court, or how much work is spend by cops due to marijuana . In the article it states ' the government spend 78 million a year on just prosecuting , arresting just for marijuana possession." By this I believe i can agree that it should be legalized. This article caught my attention quick because of the money that is simply wasted due to having weed. I was amazed at the numbers because in the article it stated " 84,000 working hours a year were due to marijuana possession,."

This article quickly grabbed my attention because i also had a fried with a similar story. He told me and my friends that there was an incident in which a random car with guys followed him home and he called the cops. the cops checked the guys car and found possession in marijuana. My friend wanted to open a case, but the crops said " Just don't even think about doing a case. This is minor, and we really don't need to take this court." This story made me think about the fact that police didn't want to put so much time or money due to the fact of the expenses and task from a person carrying marijuana possession.

I also liked the fact that in this articled they talk about other then wasting time on marijuana cases, or money they could use it on something else. I agree that there is more serious things then to be wasting so much on marijuana possession. This article seems like it will be easy because of the fact that i believe weed should be legalized. If liquor is legal trust me marijuana should be definitively legal. All in all this essay makes me feel more stronger on my opinion.

My reflection

I've noticed a little progress in my own writing because I do put more effort. I try to remember that the reader doesn't always know what I'm talking about . For example , Lets say I was to write a paper about my dog Chico. If I had said Chico is fun to play with. They could right away assume its a dog, cat, hamster and e.t.c. I have to inform readers, tell readers who exactly Chico is. Genres, is always been talked about in class and I see the importance in why a paper should maintain only one genre throughout the paper.

Writing has always been a constant battle for me, trying to maintain focus and organization. But with this class I feel as if my writing has improved greatly. First off the writing class I took before this one was less challenging and to me it seemed the teacher expected less from us. With this class I constantly feel a challenge either with writing my blog, writing my paper, or in general just the critical review we talk during class. When we are review the essays that we read from other writes in our writing book we actually see what could have been changed and I find that helpful for our future writing papers.

I believe there is little improvement in my writing just because of the fact that this is the first class my writing teacher actually talks about the says, and the writing terms. In other words this is the first writing class in which, I feel as if my professor isn't just saying exactly textbook says.But making it a bit simpler and saying it in hes/hers own words. The notes i take in this class are very helpful when it comes to writing the actual papers. The peer review sheets help me a lot just because it tells me what could have been better and what confuses readers. With the the peer review sheets you are letting your peer partner read through your essay and find the mistakes you didn't see because it is your paper. I tend to find it harder to edit my own paper then to read others and peer edit it.